Following my completion of undergraduate studies, I am driven by a strong passion to pursue further academic accomplishments in the field of finance.

There are many teenage champions such as Gu Ailing, Su Yiming, and so on who have encouraged us a lot. Obviously, they have something in common. They are trying to challenge themselves and never fear failing. Besides, they all have strong ambitions to do their best to reach the top level that they dream of. There is no denying that we should learn from them and treat them as models in our lives. Furthermore, it would be more beneficial if we could challenge ourselves all the time. With persistence and determination, we will succeed. 改进点： 1. "commen" 应为 "common"，拼写错误。 2. "challege" 应为 "challenge"，拼写错误。 3. "dreamed of" 更合适的表达是 "dream of"，因为这里指的是他们现在的理想，而不是过去的梦想。